I could not expect to kill them, he thought. I could have in my time. But I have hurt them both badly and neither one can feel very good. If I could have used a bat with two hands I could have killed the first one surely. Even now, he thought.
He did not want to look at the fish. He knew that half of him had been destroyed. The sun had gone down while he had been in the fight with the sharks.
“It will be dark soon, ” he said. “Then I should see the glow of Havana.. If I am too far to the eastward I will see the lights of one of the new beaches.”
I cannot be too far out now, he thought. I hope no one has been too worried. There is only the boy to worry, of course. But I am sure he would have confidence.
Many of the older fishermen will worry. Many others too, he thought. I live in a good town. [2, с.43]
Стоит отметить удачную русскую адаптацию фразеологизма «in and out», используемого в оригинальном тексте, которая переводится как «поживиться и отплыть» [1, с.54].
Оригинальное предложение «He knew that half of him had been destroyed» придает драматичный окрас из-за значения слова «destroyed», что означает «быть уничтоженным». Но на русский язык этот смысл теряется в переводе всех изданий следующим образом: «Он знал, что половины ее не стало» [1, с.54]. Так как есть существенная смысловая разница между словами «быть уничтоженным» и «перестать быть».
“I want it,” the boy said. “Now we must make our plans about the other things. ”
“Did they search for me? ”
“Of course. With coast guard and with planes.”
“The ocean is very big and a skiff is small and hard to see,” the old man said. He noticed how pleasant it was to have someone to talk to instead of speaking only to himself and to the sea. “I missed you,” he said. “What did you catch? ” “One the first day. One the second and two the third.”
“Very good.”
“Now we fish together again.”
“No. I am not lucky. I am not lucky anymore.”
“The hell with luck,” the boy said. “I'll bring the luck with me.”
“What will your family say? ”
“I do not care. I caught two yesterday. But we will fish together now for I still have much to learn.”
“We must get a good killing lance and always have it on board. You can make the blade from a spring leaf from an old Ford. We can grind it in Guanabacoa. It should be sharp and not tempered so it will break. My knife broke.”
“I'll get another knife and have the spring ground.”
How many days of heavy brisa have we? ”
“Maybe three. Maybe more.”
“I will have everything in order,” the boy said. “You get your hands well old man.”
“I know how to care for them. In the night I spat something strange and felt something in my chest was broken.” “Get that well too,” the boy said. “Lie down, old man, and I will bring you your cl ean shirt. And something to eat.”
“Bring any of the papers of the time that I was gone,” the old man said.
“You must get well fast for there is much that I can learn and you can teach me everything.
How much did you suffer? ” “Plenty,” the old man said.
“I'll bring the food and the papers,” the boy said. “Rest well, old man. I will bring stufffrom the drugstore for your hands.”
“Don't forget to tell Pedrico the head is his.”
“No. I will remember.”
As the boy went out the door and down the worn coral rock road he was crying again.
That afternoon there was a party of tourists at the Terrace and looking down in the water among the empty beer cans and dead barracudas a woman saw a great long white spine with a huge tail at the end that lifted and swung with the tide while the east wind blew a heavy steady sea outside the entrance to the harbour.
“What's that? ” she asked a waiter and pointed to the long backbone of the great fish that was now just garbage waiting to go out with the tide.
“Tiburon,” the waiter said. “Shark.” He was meaning to explain what had happened.
“I didn't know sharks had such handsome, beautifully formed tails.”
“I didn't either,” her male companion said.
Up the road, in his shack, the old man was sleeping again. He was still sleeping on his face and the boy was sitting by him watching him. The old man was dreaming about the lions. [2, с.48]
В русских изданиях также есть разница перевода следующей фразы:
«No. I am not lucky. I am not lucky anymore». А в изданиях и 2005 годов: «Нет, Я -- несчастливый. Мне больше не везет» [1, с.59]. Следующая цитата мальчика: «I'll bring the luck with me» переводится соответственно упоминанию «счастья»: «Япринесу счастье [1, с.59].
В данном исследовании была проведена лишь небольшая часть работы по анализу русского текста Хемингуэя «Старик и море» 2005 года издания на тему адекватности и эквивалентности перевода. И можем сделать выводы, что в издании 2005 года не всегда соблюдена конструкция повествования по сравнению с оригиналом, что означает ошибку в повествовании и возможному нарушению понимания у русского читателя данного текста. Также отмечены примеры особенностей передачи смысла на русский язык. В оригинальном тексте больше используется местоимений для образов, используемых в тексте, когда как в русском они именуются своими именами. Это касается таких образов как: «старик», «акула», «море», «океан», «Бог». Одинаковое или примерно одинаковое количество раз упоминаются образы следующих объектов: «Манолин», «рыба», «Сантьяго», «мальчик».
Также стоить отметить общую адаптацию текста на русский язык согласно менталитету и общему пониманию в русской речи. И естественно многие выражения переводятся согласно русскому видению мира, потому многие слова и выражения переводятся не дословно.
Список литературы
1. Эрнест Хемингуэй. Старик и море. СПб.: Азбука-классика, 2005 г. 60 с.
2. Ernest Hemingway. The Old Man and the Sea. 1952. 50 с.